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La Douleur Exquise

Posted on June 7, 2014 by Thewitch

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The letter found me.

Caught my ankle as I passed, and would not let go, as if imploring me to help.

The rain had cried copious tears upon your words.

My tears joined them as I read.

Nothing is more bittersweet

Than the passion and the pain

Of unrequited love.

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philosophermouseofthehedge on June 7, 2014 at 00:05 said:

Love that second line. Great word choices create a vivid image.

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- Thewitch on June 7, 2014 at 00:09 said:
  
  Thank you!!! Think I prefer being succinct, with a few good words, than waxing lyrical. Enjoyed this once I had persuaded it to squeeze out of my brain!!
  
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Cielo on June 7, 2014 at 00:18 said:

awww heartbreaking yet so sweet…

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- Thewitch on June 7, 2014 at 00:19 said:
  
  Thank you!! Had to beg this one to surface!!
  
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Kat on June 7, 2014 at 00:24 said:

Aww, you can feel the heartache.

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- Thewitch on June 7, 2014 at 00:28 said:
  
  Thanks Kat!! You know me, not normally so serious, but it does surface now and then!! You enjoying this as much as I am?
  
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  - Kat on June 8, 2014 at 12:46 said:
    
    Oh, yes! I definitely love “having to” write each day. 🙂
    
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Claudette on June 7, 2014 at 02:05 said:

Your inner poet is surfacing, and she’s doing it so well. What a wonderful choice of words.

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- Thewitch on June 7, 2014 at 12:28 said:
  
  Thank you gorgeous girl!! Means a lot!! 😀
  
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  - Claudette on June 8, 2014 at 02:44 said:
    
    I speak the truth.
    
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pavanneh on June 8, 2014 at 06:26 said:

Really shows emotion with few words. Very nice. 😀

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- Thewitch on June 8, 2014 at 07:41 said:
  
  Thank you!! Quite a task for me not to talk too much!! 🙂
  
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innatejames on June 9, 2014 at 02:02 said:

I love how you made it the rain’s fault for blurring the words. And I like how you personified the letter itself. My only note, and this is totally subjective, but the phrase “My tears joined them as I read” feels self-indulgent to me.

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